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2022-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Kindly answer the following in essay form. What special features do you think should be added to computers? Explain your answer. I think the computer needs fingerprint recognition function. There are many requirements to verify user\'s identification on the internet. Nowadays verifying identification is mostly operated messages. It takes a long time and is weak for hacking. So if we can verify our identification through fingerprint recognition function, we can feel faster and safer in certification process.

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I think the computer needs fingerprint recognition function.

>> I think computers need fingerprint recognition functions.

There are many requirements to verify user\'s identification on the internet.

>> CORRECT

Nowadays verifying identification is mostly operated messages.

>> Nowadays, verifying identification is mostly operated for messages.

It takes a long time and is weak for hacking.

>> It takes a long time and is weak for hackers.

So if we can verify our identification through fingerprint recognition function, we can feel faster and safer in certification process.

>> So if we can verify our identification through fingerprint recognition function, we can have a safer and faster verification process.

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