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2022-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Kindly answer the following in essay form. What is your favorite tradition in South Korea? Explain your answer. My favorite tradition is New Year\'s cash gifts. It is that if I perform the new year\'s bow to elder, they give me some money and advice. In this process, We wish that this year will be happy to each other. Also I can express respect to them. And this is an opportunity I can receive a lot of money. So after seollal, I always buy something I want to buy.

강사 첨삭

Hi John:)

Yes, I think this tradition is very common in Asian countries. We also have something very similar. hehehe!

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My favorite tradition is New Year\'s cash gifts. 
>> My favorite tradition is giving cash to children during Seollal. 
 
It is that if I perform the new year\'s bow to elder, they give me some money and advice.
>> Children usually bow to the elderly people and the receive money and advice afterwards. 

In this process, We wish that this year will be happy to each other. 
>> In this process, we wish that this year will be filled with happiness. 

Also I can express respect to them.
>> Also, ii can show my respect towards them. 
 
And this is an opportunity I canreceive a lot of money. 
>> I can also receive a lot of money through this. 

So after seollal, I always buy something I want to buy.
>> So after Seollal, I always buy the things that I want. 

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