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2022-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Lisa. As the famous quote says \"A family that prays together, stays together.\"


Korea also has the situation of dual-income couples that have changed the lives of most married women. 

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The majority of Korean moms work outside the home. 

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They focus on money.

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Some parents send their children to after-school programs or institutes all day.  

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They don\'t talk to each other, even though they are sitting at the same table.

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I saw some families spending more time on the phone or using the computer. 

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Actually, I have had also the same life when I look back to my childhood.

>>>> Actually, I have also had the same life when I look back on my childhood.

But Jehovah\'s witnesses seemed so familiar and deep bond each other in their happy family life when I saw them first. 

>>>> But Jehovah\'s witnesses seemed so familiar and have a deep bond with each other in their happy family life when I saw them first. 

I wanted to know how they can have unity in their family and every relationship. 

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1 Peter 2:17 Honor men of all sorts, have love for the whole association of brothers, be in fear of God, honor the king. 

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Now, I also have unity with my family and also with our spiritual family.

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My parents started to study the bible and we have real hope for the future now.

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We are happier than before. 

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Mark 3:35 Whoever does the will of God, this one is my brother and sister and mother. 

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