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What do you think is the best invention ever and why?
I think smartphone is the best invention until now. Because we can use the function of map, telephone, computer, mp3 and camera etc.
Before the smartphone was invented, we had to use these functions by each devices. But as soon as the smartphone was launched, we
didn\'t have to carry a lot of devices. We just need to carry a small device that we can hold by a hand.
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Hi [이름] :)
Smartphones really are the best inventions. They are very useful for our society nowadays. :)
I think smartphone is the best invention until now. Because we can use the function of map, telephone, computer, mp3 and camera etc.
>> I think smartphones are the best inventions until now because we can use the functions such as maps, dial pad, computer, mp3, camera etc.
Before the smartphone was invented, we had to use these functions by each devices.
>> Before smartphones were invented, we had to use these functions by individual devices.
But as soon as the smartphone was launched, we didn\'t have to carry a lot of devices.
>> But as soon as the smartphones were launched, we didn\'t have to carry a lot of devices.
We just need to carry a small device that we can hold by a hand.
>>We just need to carry a small device that we can hold by hand.
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