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2022-03-05 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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How do you think should wars be stopped and prevented? I think the country that invaded should apologize to the country which was invaded. Even if there is a dispute between two countries, a war is not a good way. They can reach a deal through argument.

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War is not good in any forms. Victims are the ones mostly affected, not the leaders.

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I think the country that invaded should apologize to the country which was invaded.

>> I think the country that invaded another country should apologize to them..

Even if there is a dispute between two countries, a war is not a good way.

>> Even if there is a dispute between two countries, having a war is not a good way.

They can reach a deal through argument.

>>They can reach a deal through an argument instead.

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