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2022-03-08 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If you can have your own business, what would it be and why? I think It will be a game development business. Because nowadays I\'m interested in it. If I have my own business about game development, I would work happily. And also I want to work with my friends who are interested in it. Actually I want to have my own business in the future.

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Hi [이름]!

I think that is a great investment. Technology continuously evolves. :)

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I think It will be a game development business.

>>I think it will be a game development business.

Because nowadays I\'m interested in it.

>> I have been interested in it nowadays.

If I have my own business about game development, I would work happily.

>> CORRECT

And also I want to work with my friends who are interested in it.

>> I also want to work with my friends who are interested in it as well.

Actually I want to have my own business in the future.

>> Actually, I want to have my own business in the future.

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