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In my opinion, it is that the proportion of the elderly among the total population is increasing due to the development of medical technology.
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In my opinion, it is that the proportion of the elderly among the total population is increasing due to the development of medical technology.
>>> Correct!
Or >>> Due to the development of medical technology, elderly population increases.
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