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2022-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

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강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Lisa!


My parents\' generation still believes in Buddhism a lot because Koreans were influenced by the Chinese long ago.

>>> correct

So, my parents\' generation is deeply permeated with Chinese culture.

>>> correct

Also, the words and cultures used during the Japanese invasion remain intact.

>>> correct

But my parents said they never thought it was a true religion, and they said they were disappointed because they felt that all religion was focusing on making money.

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But after meeting Jehovah\'s Witnesses, they said \"These are people who treat people with dignity without asking for money.

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Also, I think there are very high-level people I need to learn from them.

>>> OR: Also, I think there are very high-level people whom I need to learn from.

I think They are people who learn the Bible and apply.\"

>>> I think They are people who learn the Bible and apply it.\"

So, my mother, who was a Buddhist and a Christian, first started studying the Bible with Jehovah\'s Witnesses, and I started from a young age.

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But I still feel the generation gap. Because our generation is heavily influenced by America.

>>> But I still feel the generation gap because our generation is heavily influenced by America.

Still, living a life of studying and applying the Bible is universally consistent, so we can overcome age, generational, and cultural differences.

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After studying the Bible, I enjoy better relationships with family and relatives of other religions, and I get along better with neighbors of other religions.

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