homework

2022-04-06 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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HOMEWORK: What do you picture yourself doing 10 years from now? Share your answer in a few sentences. In that future, I live a successful life. I achieve my dreams that I live in a hoped for house and be a good influential entrepreneur. I operate many companies that helpful world. Moreover, I have a lovely husband. We go to a resort for four weeks a year. I am happy and free enough. I love development, so I try to improve myself every day even if I succeed. I do my homework with reference to your pattern feedback. I really wonder process of buying your dream house because that same my dream. Thank you Donna! Have a great evening.

강사 첨삭

Hello! Good evening, [이름] Ju!

I love your dream because it is very big yet achievable. As I told you in class, if you can measure the extent of your dream, you will know how to control and measure how far you have gone. So live your dreams and face your fears every day. There are people around you who will support you 100%. As for the process of obtaining a house, I will tell you all about it in class.

Thank you for this homework answer. It is long actually and I like the style of your exposition. Keep up the good work!

See you soon.

-T. Donna =)

In that future, I live a successful life.
>> In the future, I will live a successful life.

I achieve my dreams that I live in a hoped for house and be a good influential entrepreneur.
>> I will achieve my dreams that I will live in a house I hoped for and be a good influential entrepreneur.

I operate many companies that helpful world. Moreover, I have a lovely husband.
>> I will operate many companies that will be helpful in the world. Moreover, I will have a lovely husband.

We go to a resort for four weeks a year. I am happy and free enough.
>> We will go to a resort for four weeks a year. I will be happy and free enough.

I love development, so I try to improve myself every day even if I succeed.
>> I love development, so I will try to improve myself every day even if I will not succeed.

I do my homework with reference to your pattern feedback.
>> Correct!
Or: I did my homework in reference to your pattern feedback.

I really wonder process of buying your dream house because that same my dream.
>> I really wonder the process of buying your dream house because that is the same with my dream.

Thank you Donna! Have a great evening.
>> Correct!

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