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2012-02-29 · 첨삭 강사 Lorraine

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Thank you. My anwser is, yes.l saw tv. Most invasion of privacy is entertainer. They always appear TV and they receive attention the public. Privacy of their also receive attention. So they are obliged to invasion of privacy.

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Hello there Lisa! Thank you for sending me your composition. I am very happy because you did a great job.  Keep it up my dear student! I really appreciate your cooperation and activeness in our class. Enjoy and have a great day. See you later! ~T. Lorraine~   Thank you. >> Correct! My anwser is, yes. >> Correct! l saw tv. Most invasion of privacy is entertainer. >>As what I see on TV, invasion of privacy usually involves entertainers. (Sentence Construction) They always appear TV and they receive attention the public. >> They always appear on TV and they receive a lot of attention from the public. (Sentence Construction) Privacy of their also receive attention. >> Their private life also receives attention. (Sentence Construction) So they are obliged to invasion of privacy. >> Thus, they have no choice but to endure their invasion of privacy. (Word Choice)

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