homework 12/01 : The great problem where I live now.

Friend Jeny. i heard your story in life a little today. I feel like same feeling. I will write my story today if possible. =body= Is unemployment a great problem where you live now? Yes, I think so. There are worldwide depression but the root cause is mind of big company like SAMSUNG,HYUNDAI,LG. We call them JAEBUL in Korea. A JAEBUL has many subsidiaries, at least 20 more. After graduation, most of students want to apply to those. But JAEBUL dont't try to hire students as regular employee due to current economic situation. I think It's just only an excuse. The Constitution in Korea imposes 4 obligations like education, labor, tax and defense. Government has to be responsible for education and defense. People also has to give tax for helping government to do those. JEABUL must naturally effort to hire. That is not JAEBUL's choice but their duty. Because of these JEABUL, Only interns and temporary workers has been increasing. The government has sidelines.

Hello there, Oh!!! It is really nice to talk to you every morning. It energizes my day. There are many ways for you to enhance your skills but I want you to focus on one thing which with your grammar.  Thank you [이름] Friend Jeny. >>correcti heard your story in life a little today. >>I heard a little story abut your life today.I feel like same feeling. >>I felt the same thing.I will write my story today if possible. >>I will write my story if I have a free time today. =body=Is unemployment a great problem where you live now? >>correctYes, I think so. >>correctThere are worldwide depression but the root cause is mind of big company like SAMSUNG,HYUNDAI,LG.  >>Many people are depressed because they want to work in a big company like Samsung, Hyundai and LG We call them JAEBUL in Korea. >>correctA JAEBUL has many subsidiaries, at 20 more. >>A JAEBUL has many subsidiaries, at least 20.After graduation, most of students want to apply to those. >>After graduation, most students want to apply to these companies.But JAEBUL dont\'t try to hire students as regular employee due to current economic situation. >>But JAEBUL doesn\'t want to hire students as regular employees due to our current economic situation.I think It\'s just only an excuse.  >>It think this is only just an excuse.The Constitution in Korea imposes 4 obligations like education, labor, tax and defense. >>The Constitution of Korea imposes 4 obligations like education, labor, tax and defense.Government has to be responsible for education and defense. >>Government has to be responsible for education and defense.People also has to give tax for helping government to do those. >>The people also have to pay their taxes for helping the government to do it\'s obligations.JEABUL must naturally effort to hire. >>JEABUL must naturally make an effort to hire.That is not JAEBUL\'s choice but their duty. >>correct Because of these JEABUL, Only interns and temporary workers has been increasing. >>Because of JEABUL, the number of interns and temporary workers are increasing these days.  The government has sidelines. >>correct