homework 12.06

2023-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: How do you understand the statement: ‘You only live once (YOLO)’? In the past, I wanted to be a YOLO, but not now. When I was student, the YOLO people are trend. The YOLO people retire early, they do travel abroad, shopping, and what they want to do. I think it\'s because of YouTube and social media. A lot of people are envy of the YOLO\'s life style. But, soon after, most YOLO regret it. Because, they are overspend money, don\'t save money and then later became shorof money. So I didn\'t want to be like them, so I don\'t respect them. I think I should be don\'t conceited.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How do you understand the statement: ‘You only live once (YOLO)’?

In the past, I wanted to be a YOLO, but not now.

>> In the past, I wanted to be a person who believes in YOLO, but not anymore.

When I was student, the YOLO people are trend.
The YOLO people retire early, they do travel abroad, shopping, and what they want to do.

>> The YOLO people retire early, they travel abroad, do shopping, or do what they want to do.

I think it\'s because of YouTube and social media.

>> CORRECT!
A lot of people are envy of the YOLO\'s life style.

>> A lot of people are envy a YOLO\'s life style.

But, soon after, most YOLO regret it.

>> But, soon after, most YOLOs regret it.

Because, they are overspend money, don\'t save money and then later became shorof money.

>> Because, they overspend money, don\'t save money and then later became short of money.

So I didn\'t want to be like them, so I don\'t respect them.

>> CORRECT!
I think I should be don\'t conceited.

>> I think I shouldn\'t be conceited.

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