homework 12.08

2023-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What is the biggest political issue in your country right now? I don\'t know well about politics yet. It\'s not long since I get the vote, so I feel politics is difficult. Instead, I watched so far many people fighting because of their political orientation. But, there are still many acts that I hate the most because of politics. It\'s about forcing political orientation to young people or other people. An example of this is when I was a student. School teachers have an organization between teachers. The organization problem is that political orientation is one-side. So, sometimes some teacher who is passionate about politics is tell unbalanced story to students. I don\'t think these people are mature and wise.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What is the biggest political issue in your country right now?

I don\'t know well about politics yet.
>> CORRECT!
It\'s not long since I get the vote, so I feel politics is difficult.
>> It\'s not long since I get to vote, so I feel politics is difficult.
Instead, I watched so far many people fighting because of their political orientation.
>> CORRECT!
But, there are still many acts that I hate the most because of politics.
>> CORRECT!
It\'s about forcing political orientation to young people or other people.
>> CORRECT!
An example of this is when I was a student.
>> CORRECT!
School teachers have an organization between teachers.
>> CORRECT!
The organization problem is that political orientation is one-side.
>> The organization\'s problem is that their political orientation is one-sided.
So, sometimes some teacher who is passionate about politics is tell unbalanced story to students.
>> So, sometimes some teachers who are passionate about politics tell unbalanced story to students.
I don\'t think these people are mature and wise.
>> CORRECT!

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