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2014-12-09 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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What make me happy? when the people who I love are happy,I am also happy. Their positive feeling make me smile and we can share our pleasure each other. When I was gloomy,I saw my family with a smile in the picture. After seeing that pictures, my feeling tuened into happiness. And getting big money make me happy. I've already known that the money is not important fator in my life. but when I have big money, I am really happy unconsciously.If i win the lottery, I will be really happy I could die. When I indulged in the delightful memory,I am happy. Especially the memory I was in Austrailia makes me fun. That unforgettable memory is precious to me. I can'not change that for anything. (I can not replace that with anything) Imgine blue sky, fresh air, cool breeze and many animals in the countyside. I'm sure those also make you happy. Sometimes I really missed my life in Austraila and I would like to go back there.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Suk Chan! Thanks for sending this and sharing the things that make you happy. There are different things that make people happy. In my case, my family make me sad but at the same time, happy. They are my inspiration in life. Thus, I value them so much. Continue finding happiness from your loved ones, okay.   Take care!   ~Teacher Shanee   What make me happy?when the people who I love are happy,I am also happy. >>>Correct! [capitalize the beginning of the sentence.]Their positive feeling make me smile and we can share our pleasure each other. >>> Their positive thinking and attitude make me smile and we can share pleasure with each other.When I was gloomy,I saw my family with a smile in the picture. >>>Correct! After seeing that pictures, my feeling tuened into happiness.>>>After seeing that picture, my sadness turned into happiness. >>> OR: After seeing those pictures, I suddenly felt happy.And getting big money make me happy. >>> And getting big money make me happy. I\'ve already known that the money is not important fator in my life. >>> I already know that money is not an important factor in my life. but when I have big money, I am really happy unconsciously.\\ >>> Correct! If i win the lottery, I will be really happy I could die. >>> Correct!When I indulged in the delightful memory,I am happy. >>> Whan I indulge in delightful memories, I feel happy. Especially the memory I was in Austrailia makes me fun. >>> My memory of my stay in Australia makes me cheerful. That unforgettable memory is precious to me. >>> Correct! I can\'not change that for anything. (I can not replace that with anything) >>> Correct!Imgine blue sky, fresh air, cool breeze and many animals in the countyside. >>> Imagine the blues sky, fresh air, cool breeze and many animals in the countryside. I\'m sure those also make you happy. >>> Correct! Sometimes I really missed my life in Austraila and I would like to go back there. >>> Sometimes I really miss my life in Australia and I really want to go back there.

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