homework 12.14
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Should children be allowed to use social networking sites?
Children or teenagers are free to do social networking, but I don\'t recommend it.
Since when I was a young, smartphones have been quickly personalized.
So, a lot of content and social networking created on the Internet.
But, these days I think the content on social network is too stimulating and biased.
As a common example, there are many teenagers post dangerous and impose content to grow their social network address.
And also too easy to be a target of bullying or crime through the internet.
Because many children\'s mindsets are not mature.
The meaning of this sentence is some children just believe without doubt.
That\'s why I don\'t recommend children to do social networking.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Should children be allowed to use social networking sites?
Children or teenagers are free to do social networking, but I don\'t recommend it.
Please answer the question:
Should children be allowed to use social networking sites?
Children or teenagers are free to do social networking, but I don\'t recommend it.
>> CORRECT!
Since when I was a young, smartphones have been quickly personalized.
Since when I was a young, smartphones have been quickly personalized.
>> CORRECT!
So, a lot of content and social networking created on the Internet.
So, a lot of content and social networking created on the Internet.
>> So, a lot of contents and social networking sites are created on the Internet.
But, these days I think the content on social network is too stimulating and biased.
>> CORRECT!
As a common example, there are many teenagers post dangerous and impose content to grow their social network address.
As a common example, there are many teenagers post dangerous and impose content to grow their social network address.
>> CORRECT!
And also too easy to be a target of bullying or crime through the internet.
And also too easy to be a target of bullying or crime through the internet.
>> Also, it\'s too easy for them to be a target of bullying or crime through the internet.
Because many children\'s mindsets are not mature.
>> It\'s because many children\'s mindsets are not mature.
The meaning of this sentence is some children just believe without doubt.
>> CORRECT!
That\'s why I don\'t recommend children to do social networking.
That\'s why I don\'t recommend children to do social networking.
>> CORRECT!
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