homework 12.15
학생이 쓴 원문
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Which skills would you like to have?
I want to learn a lot of skills
The skills I want to have are speak English like a native speaker, artistic sense, and investment skills.
Among them, I want get investment skills.
These days, many people make their money through investing stocks, banks, and sometimes invest cryptocurrency(virtual Currency)
I\'m so happy to the delusion of successful investment technology.
But, investment technology is not easy as thought.
Many people said, investment is \" High risky investment and high return\".
It\'s means that if I make a risky investment, I get a lot or lose a lot.
Sometimes I think investment looks similar that gambling.
So, if I have a good investment skill, I want have stable investment sense.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Which skills would you like to have?
I want to learn a lot of skills.
Please answer the question:
Which skills would you like to have?
I want to learn a lot of skills.
>> CORRECT!
The skills I want to have are speak English like a native speaker, artistic sense, and investment skills.
The skills I want to have are speak English like a native speaker, artistic sense, and investment skills.
>> The skills I want to have are speaking English like a native speaker, artistic sense, and investment skills.
Among them, I want get investment skills.
>> Among them, I want to have investment skills.
These days, many people make their money through investing stocks, banks, and sometimes invest cryptocurrency (virtual Currency)
>> These days, many people make their money through investing stocks, banks, and sometimes investing in cryptocurrency (virtual Currency).
I\'m so happy to the delusion of successful investment technology.
>> I\'m so happy about the development of successful investment technology.
But, investment technology is not easy as thought.
>> But, investment technology is not easy as I thought.
>> But, investment technology is not easy as I thought.
Many people said, investment is \" High risky investment and high return\".
>> Many people said, \"there\'s a high return in high-risk investments.\"
It\'s means that if I make a risky investment, I get a lot or lose a lot.
>> CORRECT!
Sometimes I think investment looks similar that gambling.
Sometimes I think investment looks similar that gambling.
>> Sometimes I think investment looks similar to gambling.
So, if I have a good investment skill, I want have stable investment sense.
>> So, if I have a good investment skill, I want to have a stable investment sense.
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