homework 12/19: in 20 years time

2015-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Friend Jeny. Were you surprised me today morning ? but don't worry about it. I am fine now. For several days, There a many events like year-end party , wedding ceremony and funeral. I needed to have a rest time, but i did not do so that. =body= In 20 years time, I will be 77 years old. Maybe you are late 50s or middle 50s. I dislike to think about that, therefore I will do enjoy now. The world in 20 years will be rule by machine instead of peoples because of the advance of IT techs. Many persons will be lost their jobs under the pretense of efficiency. And a promising career in the current time may not be necessary at that time. we need to have a insight for preparing the future. English will be still necessary worldwide, even if chines will be one of main language of the world. And The conflict between religion will be still remaining. I am worry about 3rd world war due to the dispute, because it will be needed a victim of innocent civilian lives and properties.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh,

I am really grateful for you can find time to answer our daily homework. I know that you can do better than this so keep on reading books cause it can help you to make a big step in learning English. Take time to learn more about grammar.... Enjoy!!!! Keep up the good work.

T. Jeny

Friend Jeny.

>>correct
Were you surprised me today morning ?

>>Were you surprise this morning?

but don\'t worry about it. I am fine now.

>>But don\'t worry about it. I am fine now.
For several days, There a many events like year-end party , wedding ceremony and funeral.

>>For several days, there were many events like year-end party , wedding ceremony and funeral.
I needed to have a rest time, but i did not do so that.

>>I need to have a rest time, but I wasn\'t able to do so.

=body=
In 20 years time, I will be 77 years old.

>>correct
Maybe you are late 50s or middle 50s.

>>Maybe you are at your late 50\'s or mid-50\'s.
I dislike to think about that, therefore I will do enjoy now.
>>correct
The world in 20 years will be rule by machine instead of peoples because of the advance of IT techs.
>>The world in 20 years will be ruled by machines instead of people because of the advance IT techs.
Many persons will be lost their jobs under the pretense of efficiency.

>>Many people will lose their jobs under the pretense of efficiency.
And a promising career in the current time may not be necessary at that time.

>>correct

We need to have a insight for preparing the future.

>>We need to have an insight in preparation for the future.

English will be still necessary worldwide, even if chines will be one of main language of the world.
>>English will still be necessary all over the world, even if chimes will be one of main languages in the world.
And The conflict between religion will be still remaining.

>>And the conflict between religions will still exist.
I am worry about 3rd world war due to the dispute, because it will be needed a victim of innocent civilian lives and properties.

>>I am worried about World War III, due to the dispute. It will harm innocent people and destroy properties.

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