homework 12.20

2023-12-21 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question:] What are working conditions like in your country? I don\'t know well the working conditions in my country. The reason why, I have not been work on various companies yet. Instead, sometimes when I watched the news, I saw about working conditions. I felt is that a good company is has a good conditions. But, dangerous, difficult work company is not has a good conditions. The wage of employees who work in factories or construction sites are still low. These kinds of jobs are called 3D jobs by Koreans. It means Dirty, Difficult, and Dangerous. So, many people avoid these jobs. If the wage of these jobs is high or there are many good perks, it will be better environment than now.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:]
What are working conditions like in your country?

I don\'t know well the working conditions in my country.
>> CORRECT!
The reason why, I have not been work on various companies yet.
>> The reason why I have no idea is that I haven\'t tried working in various companies yet.
Instead, sometimes when I watched the news, I saw about working conditions.
>> Instead, sometimes when I watch the news, I see something about working conditions.
I felt is that a good company is has a good conditions.
>> I felt that a good company has good conditions.
But, dangerous, difficult work company is not has a good conditions.
>> But, companies that have dangerous and difficult work don\'t have good working conditions.
The wage of employees who work in factories or construction sites are still low.
>> CORRECT!
These kinds of jobs are called 3D jobs by Koreans.
>> CORRECT!
It means Dirty, Difficult, and Dangerous.
>> CORRECT!
So, many people avoid these jobs.
>> CORRECT!
If the wage of these jobs is high or there are many good perks, it will be better environment than now.
>> If the wage of these jobs is high or there are many good perks, it will be a better environment than now.

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