homework 12.27

2023-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

학생이 쓴 원문

~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: What are your goals for 2024? Many people makes goals when the approaches new year. I also have many goals that I want. Looking back, a lot of things happened this year. Among them the biggest event is I graduating from school. In other words, now I\'m not a student. But, my goal for next year is to study various things. For example, I started first time English speaking class this year. Before I learned to speak English, I felt no confidence in English. But, I started learn speaking English, I get a lot of about English and get more interested. I still lack of English speaking skills. Nevertheless, I am sure if I study this way, I will achieve my goal.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are your goals for 2024?

Many people makes goals when the approaches new year.
>> Many people make goals when the new year approaches.
I also have many goals that I want.
>> I also have many goals that I want to achieve in 2024.
Looking back, a lot of things happened this year.
>> CORRECT!
Among them the biggest event is I graduating from school.
>> Among them, the biggest event is me graduating from school.
In other words, now I\'m not a student.
>> CORRECT!
But, my goal for next year is to study various things.
>> CORRECT!
For example, I started first time English speaking class this year.
>> For example, for the first time I started my English speaking class this year.
Before I learned to speak English, I felt no confidence in English.
>> CORRECT!
But, I started learn speaking English, I get a lot of about English and get more interested.
>> But, when I started learning how to speak in English, I got more interested and learn more about the English language.
I still lack of English speaking skills.
>> I still lack English speaking skills.
Nevertheless, I am sure if I study this way, I will achieve my goal.
>> CORRECT!

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