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Writing Homework - Answer the following question: Do you think that Korean women should also join the military? ^^. =================================================================== The question is very sensitive for korean men. Acually korean men are very poor bacause they have to go military when they are very young that important for them. Somebody who don't go military(we say them "He is son of God") prepare of his future during the other mens is being in military. But the other mens who join the military forget their knowledges which studiying in university. So when day finish the duty of military they suffer for settle in their society or university .

Hello there [이름]! Thank you for sending in your composition. You shared new stories today. It's interesting because in my country men are not required to join the military. Anyway, good job. Please keep doing a good job inyour studies. I am looking forward to reading more of your compositions, so keep 'em coming! Have a good day today. ~t.Karen >.< Writing Homework - Answer the following question: Do you think that Korean women should also join the military? ^^. ==================================================================The question is very sensitive for korean men. >> Correct! ^^Acually korean men are very poor bacause they have to go military when they are very young that important for them. >> ** Use the word 'pitiful' intead of 'poor'. >> ** Please check on your sentenc contruction. >> Acually korean men are very pitiful bacause they have to go military when they are very young since that is important for them.Somebody who don\'t go military(we say them \"He is son of God\") prepare of his future during the other mens is being in military. >> ** Please check your sentence constructon. >> Someone who doesn't go to the military (we say \"He is son of God\") prepares for future while other men are in the military. But the other mens who join the military forget their knowledges which studiying in university. >> ** The plural form of 'man' is 'men' NOT 'mens'. >> But the other men who join the military forget the things they learned in the universirty. So when day finish the duty of military they suffer for settle in their society or university . >> ** Please check your sentence construction. >> **Also, try to check your spelling, be careful. 'day' and 'they' are different from each other. >> So when they finish their duty in the military, they suffer from adjusting in the society or in the university.