homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to have my own business.
The business is to make my own bakery.
Because I want to be a global baker.
And I want to give happiness to people to eat my bread.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Grace! ^^
Oh my gosh, we have the same dream!
Oh my gosh, we have the same dream!
I hope our dream will come true! ^^
- T. Rina
1. I want to have my own business.
>> CORRECT!
2. The business is to make my own bakery.
>> CORRECT!
3. Because I want to be a global baker.
>> CORRECT!
OR: I want to be an international baker.
4. And I want to give happiness to people to eat my bread.
>> And I want to give happiness to people by eating the bread I baked.
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