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2022-06-14 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I think I eat well balanced diet. I eat breakfast before I go to the school. Also I eat many fruits for breakfast. My favorite fruits are orange, strawberry, and shine musket. Then I go to the school, and I eat school meals. Nutritionist make well balanced meals. Finally, I eat dinner each thing I want. Commonly I eat [이름]chi fried rice and tteak bok it. Therefore I eat well balanced diet every day. However I eat dinner at very late time because of academy, so I think for this problem my health is little bit bad.

강사 첨삭

Hi Bella!
You did a really good job here.
Everything was expressed well and clearly.
It\'s easy to comprehend.
I can see the effort you put into it.
Keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think I eat well balanced diet. 
>> I think I eat a well-balanced diet. 
I eat breakfast before I go to the school. 
>> I eat breakfast before I go to school. 
Also I eat many fruits for breakfast. 
>> Also, I eat many kinds of fruits for breakfast. 
My favorite fruits are orange, strawberry, and shine musket. 
>> My favorite fruits are orange, strawberry, and shine musket. 
Then I go to the school, and I eat school meals. 
>> Then I go to school and I eat school meals. 
Nutritionist make well balanced meals. 
>> Nutritionists advise us to eat well-balanced meals. 
Finally, I eat dinner each thing I want. 
>> Finally, I eat whatever I want for dinner. 
Commonly I eat [이름]chi fried rice and tteak bok it. 
>> Commonly, I eat [이름]chi fried rice and tteok bbok ki.
Therefore I eat well balanced diet every day. 
>> Therefore I eat a well-balanced diet every day. 
However I eat dinner at very late time because of academy, so I think for this problem my health is little bit bad.
>> However, I eat dinner at a very late time because of my academy, so I think this has a bad effect on my health.

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