Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
The way how I spend my money usually is I spend my money half, and I save the other. I always save my half money. I save money because someday I want something expensive thing. Therefore, I save money for buy something in future. First way how I spend my money wisely is hang out with my friends. I spend a lot of money when I hang out. I have lunch, eat dessert, take photos, and do other many things with friends. Also I hang out every Sunday (sometimes at Saturday). When I back to home, I always think I spend perfect day and feel happy. Therefore, my way how to spend money wisely is save half money and use the rest money when you hang out with friends.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bella!
I think you\'re ready for the weekend.
Thank you for your efforts this week.
Keep practicing!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The way how I spend my money usually is I spend my money half, and I save the other.
>> The way I usually spend my money is to just spend half of it.
I always save my half money.
>> I always save half of my money.
I save money because someday I want something expensive thing.
>> I save money because I want to buy something expensive someday.
Therefore, I save money for buy something in future.
>> Therefore, I save money to buy something in the future.
First way how I spend my money wisely is hang out with my friends.
>> The first way to spend my money wisely is to hang out with my friends.
I spend a lot of money when I hang out.
>> Correct
I have lunch, eat dessert, take photos, and do other many things with friends.
>> I have lunch, eat dessert, take photos, and do other things with friends.
Also I hang out every Sunday (sometimes at Saturday).
>> Also, I hang out with them every Sunday (sometimes on Saturdays).
When I back to home, I always think I spend perfect day and feel happy.
>> When I get back home, I always feel that I had a perfect day and I feel happy.
Therefore, my way how to spend money wisely is save half money and use the rest money when you hang out with friends.
>> Therefore, the way I spend money wisely is to save half of my money and use the rest to hang out with my friends.
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