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2022-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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The best movie for me is [이름]ions. When I was a elementary school student, I saw that movie first time. After I saw this movie, [이름]ions became my best movie. The reason why I like [이름]ions movie is I like [이름]ion’s charm. I think [이름]ion’s best charm points are their dumb actions and their song. [이름]ions don’t use language, they just use reaction and talk together. [이름]ions are generally dumb, but some [이름]ions are specially dumb. That [이름]ions make situations more funny. Also, I like [이름]ion’s song. There is some scene [이름]ions sing a song and fight with guard. That song is so addictive. The lyric is repeated. Therefore, my best movie is [이름]ions because of [이름]ion’s dumb actions and their song. Above all, [이름]ions are cute.

강사 첨삭

Hi Bella!
You just have a gift that no one lese has.
I hope you can cultivate and grow more.
I believe in you so much.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The best movie for me is [이름]ions. 
>> The best movie for me is \"[이름]ions.\"
When I was a elementary school student, I saw that movie first time. 
>> When I was an elementary school student, I saw that movie for the first time. 
After I saw this movie, [이름]ions became my best movie. 
>> After I saw this movie, \"[이름]ions\" became my favorite movie. 
The reason why I like [이름]ions movie is I like [이름]ion’s charm.
>> The reason why I like the \"[이름]ions\" movie is I like the characters\' charm. 
I think [이름]ion’s best charm points are their dumb actions and their song. 
>> I think the [이름]ions\' most char[이름]g points are their dumb actions and their song. 
[이름]ions don’t use language, they just use reaction and talk together. 
>> They don’t use language because they just use expressions while talking to each other. 
[이름]ions are generally dumb, but some [이름]ions are specially dumb. 
>> Correct
That [이름]ions make situations more funny. 
>> Correct
Also, I like [이름]ion’s song. 
>> Also, I like the [이름]ions\' song. 
There is some scene [이름]ions sing a song and fight with guard. 
>> There is a scene where the [이름]ions were singing a song and fighting with a guard. 
That song is so addictive. 
>> That song was so addictive. 
The lyric is repeated. 
>> The lyrics were repetitive. 
Therefore, my best movie is [이름]ions because of [이름]ion’s dumb actions and their song. 
>> Therefore, the best movie for me is \"[이름]ions\" because of their dumb actions and their song. 
Above all, [이름]ions are cute.
>> Correct

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