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I have visited a waterpark. When I was young, my family went waterpark very often. I visited waterpark most recently 4 years ago. Also I visited waterpark with my friend’s family. I like waterpark and there are many reasons. First, I like swim[이름]g. I couldn’t swim well, but I like cool feeling when I swim[이름]g. Second, I can enjoy something to play with water. I like amusement park and I like water, too. Therefore, I like waterpark. I can ride roller coaster and other thing with cool water. I visited water park when I was young, I can’t visit waterpark recently. I hope to visit waterpark this year.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bella!
Your choice of words is really interesting.
You really know how to paint a picture.
Keep improving and believing in yourself.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I have visited a waterpark.
>> Correct
When I was young, my family went waterpark very often.
>> When I was young, my family went to waterparks very often.
I visited waterpark most recently 4 years ago.
>> The last time I visited a waterpark was 4 years ago.
Also I visited waterpark with my friend’s family.
>> Also, I visited a waterpark with my friend’s family.
I like waterpark and there are many reasons.
>> I like waterparks and there are many reasons.
First, I like swim[이름]g.
>> Correct
I couldn’t swim well, but I like cool feeling when I swim[이름]g.
>> I can\'t swim well, but I like feeling cool when I\'m swim[이름]g.
Second, I can enjoy something to play with water.
>> Second, I can enjoy playing with water.
I like amusement park and I like water, too.
>> I like amusement parks and I like water, too.
Therefore, I like waterpark.
>> Therefore, I like waterparks.
I can ride roller coaster and other thing with cool water.
>> I can ride roller coasters and other things with cool water.
>> I can ride roller coasters and other things with cool water.
I visited water park when I was young, I can’t visit waterpark recently.
>> I used to visit water parks when I was young but I can\'t do that recently.
I hope to visit waterpark this year.
>> I hope to visit a waterpark this year.
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