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2022-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

I wish I have writing talent. First, I can become a best writer and save money. If I got writing talent, I can become rich to write many books. If I got writing talent, I can write many genre’s books, so I am said genius writer. Also I can be very popular. Second, I think writing talent give many helps on school project. In school, we test ethics, English etc to writing. When We became a university students, we should write many essays. Therefore, writing talent can give many helps to me because I am a student! For this reasons, I wish I have writing talent.

강사 첨삭

Hi Bella!
It\'s another week of writing to add to your cap.
You have done well.
I expect more improvement next week.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I wish I have writing talent. 
>> I wish I have a talent for writing. 
First, I can become a best writer and save money. 
>> First, I can become the best writer and make a lot of money. 
If I got writing talent, I can become rich to write many books. 
>> If I have this talent, I can become rich from writing many books. 
If I got writing talent, I can write many genre’s books, so I am said genius writer.
>> Also, if I have this talent, I can write many books from different genres, so I people can say that I\'m a genius writer. 
Also I can be very popular. 
>> Correct
Second, I think writing talent give many helps on school project. 
>> Second, I think this talent give a lot of help on school projects. 
In school, we test ethics, English etc to writing. 
>> In school, we have tests on Ethics and others where we have to write.
When We became a university students, we should write many essays. 
>> When we become university students, we should write many essays. 
Therefore, writing talent can give many helps to me because I am a student! 
>> Therefore, the talent for writing can give me a lot of help because I am a student! 
For this reasons, I wish I have writing talent.
>> For these reasons, I wish I have a talent for writing. 

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