homework
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Describe an activity that keeps you healthy while you enjoy / You should mention: What the activity is, Where you do the activity, Whom you do the activity with, and Why you think doing it is healthy.
The activity that keeps our healthy while we enjoy is playing sport. I play soccer in Royale parc with my firends. I\'ll have healthy corps when I play sport and we can enjoy while playing sport.
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Hi Se [이름],
Thank you for answering your homework. You have good ideas but I suggest making your answer longer by elaborating and sharing more of your experiences when speaking and writing You can elaborate yourself and you can find words to use for your correct grammatical structures. You can improve your writing by understanding model texts and how they\'re structured. I would recommend you keep a daily essay to practice your writing skills. Keep improving. ~ Teacher QUENNY..
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Describe an activity that keeps you healthy while you enjoy / You should mention: What the activity is, Where you do the activity, Whom you do the activity with, and Why you think doing it is healthy.
>> Describe an activity that keeps you healthy while you enjoy it / You should mention: What the activity is, Where you do the activity, Whom you do the activity with, and Why you think doing it is healthy.(CORRECT)
The activity that keeps our healthy while we enjoy is playing sport. I play soccer in Royale parc with my firends. I\'ll have healthy corps when I play sport and we can enjoy while playing sport.
>> Like everybody else, I like to stay healthy while also enjoying life at the same time. Playing sports like Soccer is what I enjoy and one of my favorite hobbies. I play Socer with my friends in Royale Park and I\'ll have healthy corps when I play sport. And playing Soccer improves my health because it lowers my body fat and improves my muscle tone. It also builds my strength and endurance that\'s why I enjoy playing Soccer with my friends to enjoy life and stay healthy.
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Describe an activity that keeps you healthy while you enjoy / You should mention: What the activity is, Where you do the activity, Whom you do the activity with, and Why you think doing it is healthy.
The activity that keeps our healthy while we enjoy is playing sport. I play soccer in Royale parc with my firends. I\'ll have healthy corps when I play sport and we can enjoy while playing sport.
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