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When I buy a car, I concern about appearance at first.
I like a car which has big size and is angular.
In korea, some people tend to ignore driver who has small car or female driver.
I don\'t want to be ignored by other drivers and look like female driver in the road.
Also if I have car accident, I am less hurt when I drive a big car. I think I drive the bigger car, I am more safe.
Secondly, I concern proper price. Because the value of a car is getting decrease every year, I think buying too much expensive car is extravagant. I can pay for a car a maximum 50million won. I can\'t pay more than that.
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Hi, [이름]y!
I agree that there are a lot of things to consider when buying a new car. Yes, appearance and price are important, but still, safety should be your main concern.
-T. Caitlyn
When I buy a car, I concern about appearance at first.>> When I buy a car, I consider the appearance first.
I like a car which has big size and is angular.
>> I like a car which is big in size and angular.
In korea, some people tend to ignore driver who has small car or female driver.
I like a car which has big size and is angular.
>> I like a car which is big in size and angular.
In korea, some people tend to ignore driver who has small car or female driver.
>> In Korea, some people tend to ignore a driver who has a small car or is female.
I don\'t want to be ignored by other drivers and look like female driver in the road.
>> I don\'t want to be ignored by other drivers and look like a female driver on the road.
Also if I have car accident, I am less hurt when I drive a big car.
I don\'t want to be ignored by other drivers and look like female driver in the road.
>> I don\'t want to be ignored by other drivers and look like a female driver on the road.
Also if I have car accident, I am less hurt when I drive a big car.
>> Also, if I have a car accident, it will be less likely for me to get hurt when I drive a big car.
I think I drive the bigger car, I am more safe.
>> I think driving big cars is safer.
Secondly, I concern proper price.
>> I think driving big cars is safer.
Secondly, I concern proper price.
>> Second, I consider the price.
Because the value of a car is getting decrease every year, I think buying too much expensive car is extravagant.
>>Because the value of a car decreases every year, I think buying a very expensive car is extravagant.
I can pay for a car a maximum 50million won.
>>I can pay a maximum of 50 million won for a car.
I can\'t pay more than that.
>> CORRECT.
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