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2022-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I don’t like work in the zoo. Because I don’t like some places where noisy and many people are there. I have been went to the zoo when I was young. I think I never go to the zoo since elementary student. I think a good thing about the zoo is we can see various animals at one place. It’s difficult to see that animals outside of zoo. But I think a bad thing about the zoo is every animals are tired. If I always live in small cage and everyone see me, I’m really sad and tired.

강사 첨삭

Hi Bella!
It\'s good to celebrate the end of the week with a  bang.
You have done great.
I want you to know that it\'s being appreciated.
We always have to recognize constant improvement.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I don’t like work in the zoo. 
>> I don’t like to work in a zoo. 
Because I don’t like some places where noisy and many people are there. 
>> It\'s because I don’t like places where it\'s noisy and many people are there. 
I have been went to the zoo when I was young. 
>> I have been to the zoo when I was young. 
I think I never go to the zoo since elementary student. 
>> I think I haven\'t gone again since I was an elementary student. 
I think a good thing about the zoo is we can see various animals at one place. 
>> I think a good thing about the zoo is that we can see various animals in one place. 
It’s difficult to see that animals outside of zoo. 
>> It’s difficult to see animals outside of the zoo. 
But I think a bad thing about the zoo is every animals are tired. 
>> However, I think a bad thing about the zoo is that every animal there is tired. 
If I always live in small cage and everyone see me, I’m really sad and tired.
>> If I always live in a small cage and everyone watches me, I would really be sad and tired.

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