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My hometown is typically called bedtown. In Korea, bedtown means cities of around the capital. They are close to Seoul and got a convenient trasportation system. Most people who living in bedtown, go to Seoul to work because most of the companies are concentrated in Seoul. So most Bucheon people who go to seoul to work seem tired from monday to friday. However, Buchoen turn into energetic city when weekends. In the park, a huge number of people take a walk with their dogs and cats. Also they come out to playground to exercise.
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Hi, [이름] Ho!
I can really see your improvement when it comes to writing. You can now create great sentences with correct grammar. Keep it up!
-T. Caitlyn
My hometown is typically called bedtown.
>> CORRECT
In Korea, bedtown means cities of around the capital.
>>In Korea, bedtown means cities around the capital.
They are close to Seoul and got a convenient trasportation system.
>> They are close to Seoul and have a convenient transportation system.
Most people who living in bedtown, go to Seoul to work because most of the companies are concentrated in Seoul.
>> Most people living in bedtown go to Seoul to work because most of the companies are concentrated in Seoul.
So most Bucheon people who go to seoul to work seem tired from monday to friday.
>> So most people from Bucheon who goes to work in Seoul seem tired from Monday to Friday.
However, Buchoen turn into energetic city when weekends.
>> However, Buchoen turns into an energetic city on weekends.
In the park, a huge number of people take a walk with their dogs and cats.
>>CORRECT
Also they come out to playground to exercise.
>>Also, they come out to the playground to exercise.
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