Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
My favorite website is Youtube. I spend many times at Youtube. In Youtube, I can watch about anything what I want. Like variety, music and vlog. Also, I don’t have many time to use Youtube, I can watch shorts. Shorts are so short, but at that small moment, they give me some pleasure. Actually, I like use Netflix, too but I should search something which I watch. I spend looking at one website in 20 [이름]utes
강사 첨삭
Hi Bella!
Let\'s keep things organized.
It\'s better to use the correct terms when you make your sentences.
Keep this in [이름]d for your future compositions.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
My favorite website is Youtube.
>> My favorite website is YouTube.
I spend many times at Youtube.
>> I spend a lot of time on YouTube.
In Youtube, I can watch about anything what I want.
>> On YouTube, I can watch anything that I want.
Like variety, music and vlog.
>> I can watch videos including variety, music and vlogs.
Also, I don’t have many time to use Youtube, I can watch shorts.
>> Also, I don’t have a lot of time to go on YouTube so I just watch shorts.
Shorts are so short, but at that small moment, they give me some pleasure.
>> Shorts are not very long, but during those moments, they give me some pleasure.
Actually, I like use Netflix, too but I should search something which I watch.
>> Actually, I like watching Netflix, too but I always have to search for something to watch.
I spend looking at one website in 20 [이름]utes
>> I spend 20 [이름]utes just looking for the right movie.
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