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Hello, Donna.
My eyes are getting better owing to your concerns.
This morning, we started a new topic. \"eating\"
As you know it, I love to eat some delicious food.
One of my routine jobs in the morning is to choose the lunch menu every morning.
Foods are very important to me.
Thus, I gained weights, and it causes knee pain.
Moreover, I also got a digestive problem.
Some foods make our skin unhealthy.
Among them, the most harmful food is an alcohol.
When we drink, our facial vessels can be dilated, and skins can be getting dry.
In addition, after drinking, we usually don\'t have a good quality of sleep, and then we are so tired, so it makes our skin more terrible.
Meanwhile, high sugar concentrated foods can increase the sebum in our skin, and it can makes many kinds of folliculitis including acne.
For our better skin, we should stay away from fastfoods like hamburger, pizza, ramen, and so on.
It\'s so difficult for us to select only good foods.
I wish you can enjoy your lunch today~ LOL
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Dr. [이름]!
I had a light and filling lunch. I hope that your meal choice for your clinic today was very healthy and tasty. Food is life so we have to do our best to eat right. Well, curating your meals is a huge task to fulfill. The health of your team is in your hands. I am sure that you have a very good taste when it comes to food menu.
Most food that we ingest may be nutritious. However, beverages such as alcohol goes directly to the blood stream and take effect in just a few minutes. So, the damage that it creates to our entire physical system can be cumulative overtime. Drinking moderately is recommended therefore. If our skin still gets bad, people just have to see you as a dermatological doctor who can give them professional advice on how to mainatain a flawless skin.
Keep up the straightforward and clear ideas in your sentences. In addition, you have used complex sentences and they were excellent.
Catch you again soon. Enjoy your lunch!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
My eyes are getting better owing to your concerns.
>> Correct!
Or: My eyes are getting better, thanks to your concern.
This morning, we started a new topic. \"eating\"
>> Correct!
Or:This morning, we started a new topic, \"eating\"
As you know it, I love to eat some delicious food.
>> Correct!
One of my routine jobs in the morning is to choose the lunch menu every morning.
>> Correct!
Foods are very important to me.
>> Correct!
Thus, I gained weights, and it causes knee pain.
>> Thus, I gained weight, and it causes knee pain.
Moreover, I also got a digestive problem.
Moreover, I also got a digestive problem.
>> Correct!
Some foods make our skin unhealthy.
>> Correct!
Among them, the most harmful food is an alcohol.
>> Among them, the most harmful beverage is alcohol.
When we drink, our facial vessels can be dilated, and skins can be getting dry.
>> When we drink, our facial vessels can be dilated, and the skin can (be getting dry/ get dry).
In addition, after drinking, we usually don\'t have a good quality of sleep, and then we are so tired, so it makes our skin more terrible.
In addition, after drinking, we usually don\'t have a good quality of sleep, and then we are so tired, so it makes our skin more terrible.
>> Correct!
Meanwhile, high sugar concentrated foods can increase the sebum in our skin, and it can makes many kinds of folliculitis including acne.
Meanwhile, high sugar concentrated foods can increase the sebum in our skin, and it can makes many kinds of folliculitis including acne.
>> Meanwhile, high sugar concentrated foods can increase the sebum in our skin, and it can make many kinds of folliculitis including acne.
For our better skin, we should stay away from fastfoods like hamburger, pizza, ramen, and so on.
For our better skin, we should stay away from fastfoods like hamburger, pizza, ramen, and so on.
>> Correct!
Or: For better skin, we should stay away from fastfoods like hamburger, pizza, ramen, and so on.
It\'s so difficult for us to select only good foods.
It\'s so difficult for us to select only good foods.
>> Correct!
I wish you can enjoy your lunch today~ LOL
>> Correct!
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