homework
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HOMEWORK:
Which is better: to have a good heart or to have a good face? Answer in a few sentences.
It is completely important to have a good heart. Our body and mind are one, not separate. If we have a negative mind, It leaks out though our appearance. On the contrary, If we have a positive mind, It show our happy face.
Happy Monday with you!
Have a good evening Donna.
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Good evening too, [이름] Ju!
Possessing both beautiful body and mind is a gift. Sometimes, we can be blessed with one, others none. ^^ Anyway, a beautiful heart is something that we can train to have overtime. It is a choice we make to live for others and create positive impact towards the world. Hence, choosing to own a beautiful heart is a real treasure until one grows old. It glows forever and lives in everyone\'s memory when all the beauty in one\'s face fades.
Than you for this well-written answer! Some of the suggestions were underlined so you can see them easily. The rest of your sentences were carefully written. Wonderful job!
See you again soon!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Happy Monday with you!
Have a good evening Donna.
Our body and mind are one, not separate.
>> Corerct!
If we have a negative mind, It leaks out though our appearance.
>> Correct!
Or: If we have a negative mind, it leaks out though our appearance.
On the contrary, If we have a positive mind, It show our happy face.
>> On the contrary, if we have a positive mind, it show on our happy face.
Happy Monday with you!
>> Correct!
Or: Happy Monday to you!
Have a good evening Donna.
>> Correct!
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