Homework
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Fashion give affect to our lives. People try to follow fashion so every fashion, people buy new things about new fashion. Also fashion is change very fast. Therefore, people waste money to buy unnecessary clothes and make many trash. This are bad things about the fashion.
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~~ Teacher Sharon
Fashion give affect to our lives.
>> Fashion affects our lives.
People try to follow fashion so every fashion, people buy new things about new fashion.
>> People try to follow fashion trends so when there\'s a new one, people buy new things to be fashionable.
Also fashion is change very fast.
>> Also fashion changes very fast.
Therefore, people waste money to buy unnecessary clothes and make many trash.
>> Therefore, people waste money in buying unnecessary clothes and this produces a lot of trash.
This are bad things about the fashion.
>> These are some bad things about fashion.
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