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I think food is beco[이름]g less safe to eat. It’s because animals getting worse because of nature. First, people throw away many trashes to sea and mountain. Therefore animals eat that foods and they can have problem of their body. Second, there are a lot of virus nowadays. If animals have virus, and people eat that animals then it would be very serious problem. Even we can die, eat animals that have virus.
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I think food is beco[이름]g less safe to eat.
>> Correct
It’s because animals getting worse because of nature.
>> It’s because animals are getting worse because of nature.
First, people throw away many trashes to sea and mountain.
>> First, people throw trash into seas and mountains.
Therefore animals eat that foods and they can have problem of their body.
>> Animals eat food from nature and they can have problems with their bodies.
Second, there are a lot of virus nowadays.
>> Second, there are different kinds of virus nowadays.
If animals have virus, and people eat that animals then it would be very serious problem.
>> If animals have a virus, and people eat those animals, then, it would be a very serious problem.
Even we can die, eat animals that have virus.
>> We can even die if we eat animals that have a virus.
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