Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Good evening, T.donna.
How was your day?
In this morning class, you did a makeup and talked with quite voice.
So, I wonder if you had a blast.
Regarding our clinic, there was no bad news.
I just worked hard and got enough income.
I love this peaceful work life.
Today\'s homework is about me as a friend.
I am a social man; I mean I am friendly, warm, and have a good empathy.
That\'s why I can make a friend so easily.
Thus, many people would consider me a good person.
However, because I had many social meetings with lots of people, I sometimes couldn\'t focus on close friends.
As a result, some of my close friends were disappointed with that, and I think this is my all mistake.
Selection and focusing are very important in our lives.
As we are busy everyday, we often forget the most important thing.
I mean my goal of life is a happiness, and for that, I need my family and close friends.
I regret that I took my friendship for a granted.
Hence, I will try to be a good friend.
Catch you soon~
강사 첨삭
Hi, Dr. [이름]!
I surely had a blast at work today. My voice was soft since I could not make too much noise, I was surrounded by other teachers too. Since I knew that I will meet some of them, I put on some make up since we all have never met each other before until today.
Anyway, it is very good to hear about the peaceful and pleasant work dynamics in your clinic. I think that you have chosen clinic staff who have calm characters. So, I hope you can all keep the peace for a very long time.
Now in friendship, we need to examine how we devote our energy to the most important people in our lives. Friends can almost be our family and if we want them in our lives, we need to find time to be with them. Time management is key to this. Moreover, the quality of time spent with them too matters. If we love our friends, they will give it back in many folds. So we ought to be a very good one.
Then, kindly go over my suggestions to a few of your sentences. You always convey your thoughts well and you are always honest about your answers. Keep up the hard, smart, and consistent work!
See you in a few.
-T. Donna~
Good evening, T.donna.
>> Correct!
Or: Donna
How was your day?
>> Correct!
In this morning class, you did a makeup and talked with quite voice.
>> This morning in class, you did your makeup and talked with a quiet voice.
So, I wonder if you had a blast.
>> Correct!
Regarding our clinic, there was no bad news.
>> Correct!
I just worked hard and got enough income.
>> Correct!
I love this peaceful work life.
>> Correct!
Today\'s homework is about me as a friend.
>> Correct!
I am a social man; I mean I am friendly, warm, and have a good empathy.
>> Correct! Great sentence!
That\'s why I can make a friend so easily.
>> Correct!
Thus, many people would consider me a good person.
>> Correct!
However, because I had many social meetings with lots of people, I sometimes couldn\'t focus on close friends.
>> Correct!
As a result, some of my close friends were disappointed with that, and I think this is my all mistake.
>> As a result, some of my close friends were disappointed with that, and I think this is all my mistake.
Selection and focusing are very important in our lives.
>> Selecting and focusing are very important in our lives.
As we are busy everyday, we often forget the most important thing.
>> Correct!
I mean my goal of life is a happiness, and for that, I need my family and close friends.
>> I mean my goal in life is happiness, and for that, I need my family and close friends.
I regret that I took my friendship for a granted.
>> I regret that I took my friendship for granted.
Hence, I will try to be a good friend.
>> Correct!
Catch you soon~
>> Correct!
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