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2022-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I want to be a Veterinarian as great as Chae hyun [이름]l. To be a great Vet, I shouln’t break the sign I made. First sign that I made is I must study hard. It’s because, Vets have to a lot of knowledge about animals. Therefore, I study hard to get a lot of knowledge. Second sign is I must read many books. There are much information about animals in books. If I read many books, then I can go through surgery much easily. The last sign is I must not give up to be a Vet. Being a Vet is so difficult and it takes a lot of effort. Even if, it’s hard to become a Vet, I hope I don’t give up. I will follow the sign and I will achieve my dream.

강사 첨삭

Hi Bella!
I hope this helps you out.
if you have any questions, you can ask me later in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I want to be a Veterinarian as great as Chae hyun [이름]l. 
>> I want to be a veterinarian as great as Chae Hyun [이름]l. 
To be a great Vet, I shouln’t break the sign I made. 
>> To be a great vet, I should follow the signs I made for myself.
First sign that I made is I must study hard. 
>> The first sign says, \"I must study hard.\"
It’s because, Vets have to a lot of knowledge about animals. 
>> It’s because vets need to have a lot of knowledge about animals. 
Therefore, I study hard to get a lot of knowledge. 
>> Therefore, I study hard to acquire a lot of knowledge. 
Second sign is I must read many books. 
>> The second sign says, \"I must read different books.\"
There are much information about animals in books. 
>> There is much information about animals in books. 
If I read many books, then I can go through surgery much easily. 
>> If I read many books, then I can go through surgery very easily. 
The last sign is I must not give up to be a Vet. 
>> The last sign says, \"I must never give up on my dream to become a vet.\"
Being a Vet is so difficult and it takes a lot of effort. 
>> Being a vet is so difficult and it takes a lot of effort. 
Even if, it’s hard to become a Vet, I hope I don’t give up. 
>> Even if it’s hard to become a vet, I hope I don’t give up. 
I will follow the sign and I will achieve my dream.
>> I will follow my own signs and I know I will achieve my dream someday. 

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