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I think it would be considered a \"vice\". Sometimes, I like eating chocolate when I need some more energy. But If someone often eats a lot of it, they may not be healthy. So they will has to see a dentist. And their family are effected them. we know how it costs for healing the teeth.
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I understand what you mean, that vice is something that can cause harm or can be a bother to others. Yes, chocolates are harmless but eating too much can lead to negative effects on our health.
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I think it would be considered a \"vice\".
>> CORRECT
Sometimes, I like eating chocolate when I need some more energy. But If someone often eats a lot of it, they may not be healthy.
>> Sometimes, I like eating chocolate when I need some energy but eating a lot of it often may not be healthy.
So they will has to see a dentist. And their family are effected them.
>> So they will have to see a dentist and their family can be affected by it.
we know how it costs for healing the teeth.
>> We know how much it costs to fix our teeth.
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