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학생이 쓴 원문
Hello.
Today is my birthday eve.
Thus, my wife prepared some delicious foods for breakfast tomorrow.
I actually ate some of those foods, though.
Moreover, Dr. [Name] is preparing a special food \"seasoned Bendeng-i\"; It is a kind of small fish.
A sister of Dr. [Name] has a restaurant in Gang-Wha island, a representative food there is Bendeng-i.
I really love the food.
I can\'t wait tomorrow.
So, there are special plans for my birthday meal.
For breakfast, my wife will serve a good home-cooked food.
And for lunch, Dr. [Name] and I will eat a seasoned Bendeng-i. Oh my god!!
Finally, for dinner, I\'d like to drink a beer with various foods including Bendeng-i and home-cooked food.
As you can see this, it\'s hard to lose my weight.
As I gain weight more and more, the risk of HTN, hyperlipidemia, DM will be higher.
When I was over 90kg, I had pains of my knee and shoulder.
To keep my health, I have to control of food and drink.
Nevertheless, I feel like a boy now; I am looking foward tomorrow.
See you.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Dr. [이름]!
Excellent food with all the people you love is the most awesome way to celebrate your birthday. I wish you a stress-free celebration!
I wonder how bendang-i tastes like... I am familiar with the miyuk guk for a longer life.
Today, I won\'t keep my message long. As you already know it, my reminders of reading the suggestions I made as well as my commnedation to a job well done goes for your homework.
Thus:
Enjoy your very special day!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Today is my birthday eve.
>> Correct!
Thus, my wife prepared some delicious foods for breakfast tomorrow.
>> Correct!
Or: food
I actually ate some of those foods, though.
>> Correct!
Or: food
Moreover, Dr. [Name] is preparing a special food \"seasoned Bendeng-i\"; It is a kind of small fish.
>> Moreover, Dr. [Name] is preparing a special food called \"seasoned Bendeng-i\"; it is a kind of small fish.
Or: Moreover, Dr. [Name] is preparing for a special food called \"seasoned Bendeng-i\" which is a kind of small fish.
A sister of Dr. [Name] has a restaurant in Gang-Wha island, a representative food there is Bendeng-i.
A sister of Dr. [Name] has a restaurant in Gang-Wha island, a representative food there is Bendeng-i.
>>: (The/A) sister of Dr. [Name] has a restaurant in Gang-Wha iIsland and the representative food there is Bendeng-i.
I really love the food.
>> Correct!
I can\'t wait tomorrow.
>> I can\'t wait for tomorrow.
So, there are special plans for my birthday meal.
>> So, those are the special plans for my birthday meal.
For breakfast, my wife will serve a good home-cooked food.
For breakfast, my wife will serve a good home-cooked food.
>> Correct!
And for lunch, Dr. [Name] and I will eat a seasoned Bendeng-i. Oh my god!!
>> Correct!
Or: And for lunch, Dr. [Name] and I will eat a seasoned Bendeng-i. Oh my god!
Finally, for dinner, I\'d like to drink a beer with various foods including Bendeng-i and home-cooked food.
Finally, for dinner, I\'d like to drink a beer with various foods including Bendeng-i and home-cooked food.
>> Correct!
As you can see this, it\'s hard to lose my weight.
As you can see this, it\'s hard to lose my weight.
>> Correct!
As I gain weight more and more, the risk of HTN, hyperlipidemia, DM will be higher.
As I gain weight more and more, the risk of HTN, hyperlipidemia, DM will be higher.
>> Correct!
When I was over 90kg, I had pains of my knee and shoulder.
When I was over 90kg, I had pains of my knee and shoulder.
>> Correct!
To keep my health, I have to control of food and drink.
To keep my health, I have to control of food and drink.
>> To keep my health, I have to control my food and drinks.
Nevertheless, I feel like a boy now; I am looking foward tomorrow.
>> Nevertheless, I feel like a boy now; I am looking foward to tomorrow.
See you.
See you.
>> Correct!
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