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The movie I watched recently is Malmoi. Malmoi is a movie has content about Koreans protect their language. It’s background is Japanese colonial period. At that time, Koreans couldn’t their language, because Japan conquered Korean. Therefore, Koreans study about their language secretly. I was deeply impressed in this movie. It’s because while they protect language, a lot of people were sacrificed. I could know the language that I use very easily is made to a lot of people’s sacrifice.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bella!
Thank you for the effort today.
You can improve your sentences by giving examples.
I always emphasize this.
They can help you get your point across more effectively.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The movie I watched recently is Malmoi.
>> Correct
Malmoi is a movie has content about Koreans protect their language.
>> Malmoi is a movie about Koreans protecting their language.
It’s background is Japanese colonial period.
>> It was set during the Japanese colonial period.
At that time, Koreans couldn’t their language, because Japan conquered Korean.
>> At that time, Koreans couldn’t speak their language because Japan conquered Korea.
Therefore, Koreans study about their language secretly.
>> Therefore, Koreans studied about their language secretly.
I was deeply impressed in this movie.
>> I was deeply impressed with this movie.
It’s because while they protect language, a lot of people were sacrificed.
>> It’s because while protecting the language, a lot of people were sacrificed.
I could know the language that I use very easily is made to a lot of people’s sacrifice.
>> Now, I am aware that the language I\'m currently using was made through a lot of people’s sacrifices.
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