Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, T.Donna.
I had a hectic day as usual Monday.
This morning, I took my morning off and I visited my new apartment which built completely a few days ago.
My wife and I checked defects of new house.
In Korea, this is a common thing.
After building a new apartment, we usually check defects and informed those to the building company.
After that, the building company fixes those in no time.
If we move on those defects, we probably have trouble in fixing later.
And Dr. [Name] and I had a discussion about our future clinic in lunch time.
We decided to change our new business somewhat, and it made me confused and stressed.
We had no choice though.
In addition, I had a meeting with my staff who are chiefs in each field this evening.
As you guess, now I am so tired.
However, I have to make educational files and the script for coming Youtube ASAP.
How poor...
Anyway, I want to travel all over the world before I die.
Also, I want to be a singer or actor someday.
How about you?
See you~
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Dr. [이름]!
You had one of the busiest day of the year yesterday, However, by now, you might feel very accomplished since you checked your new apartment, informed the builders, had a discussion with Dr. [Name], and met the managers of your clinic. On top of it all, you did your composition homework! Wow, that is so amazingly remarkable. I had a busy day as well yesterday and I had a headache in the evening, thus, I slept early.
Regarding your future clinic, change is inevitable hence, whatever works better, you have to be ready. I\'m glad not to hear any trouble with your staff lately. I just wish you strength today to finish your YouTube script for your video. When you are tired, you better pause and take a break.
Since out time on earth is limited, people wish for things they want to happen. They are the things contained in their bucket list. You are lucky that your wife loves to travel. Someday, when your children will be old, you can enjoy travelling together.
For this homework, there are combinations of long and short sentences. It is very natural and conversational for a journal type of writing. Are you also going to make English YouTube videos? I look forward to that day. Excellent writing. Now, I have to check one of your essays.
P.S. my bucket list is to get married in a heartwarming ceremony.
See you!
-T. Donna~
Hello, T. Donna.
>> Correct!
I had a hectic day as usual Monday.
>> I had a hectic day as usual this Monday.
This morning, I took my morning off and I visited my new apartment which built completely a few days ago.
>> This morning, I took my morning off and I visited my new apartment which was built completely a few days ago.
My wife and I checked defects of new house.
>> My wife and I checked the defects of the new house.
In Korea, this is a common thing.
>> Correct!
After building a new apartment, we usually check defects and informed those to the building company.
>> After building a new apartment, we usually check the defects and inform those to the building company.
After that, the building company fixes those in no time.
>> Correct!
If we move on those defects, we probably have trouble in fixing later.
>> If we move on those defects, we probably have trouble in fixing them later.
And Dr. [Name] and I had a discussion about our future clinic in lunch time.
>> And, Dr. [Name] and I had a discussion about our future clinic (at/ during) lunch time.
We decided to change our new business somewhat, and it made me confused and stressed.
>> Correct!
We had no choice though.
>> Correct!
In addition, I had a meeting with my staff who are chiefs in each field this evening.
>> Correct!
As you guess, now I am so tired.
>> Correct!
However, I have to make educational files and the script for coming Youtube ASAP.
>> However, I have to make educational files and the script for the upcoming YouTube ASAP.
How poor...
>> Correct!
Anyway, I want to travel all over the world before I die.
>> Correct!
Also, I want to be a singer or actor someday.
>> Correct!
How about you?
How about you?
>> Correct!
See you~
>> Correct!
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