Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, T.Donna.
Today is already Wednesday.
I think I was always busy nowadays.
There were many things during all day.
This morning, I visited the city public health center, and then went to the city tax office.
I also went to the phone shop and bought a new cellphone.
I used previous phone for more than 4 years and it didn\'t work well lately.
So, I had to get a new one.
And you know what?
It took around 2 hours to transfer data from old phone to new one.
Because I had an important meeting at lunch time, I could\'ve had trouble in contacting to others.
Fortunately, it was all done in time.
Lunch time meeting is about our new building for new hospital.
We met a building sales man, bank men and an interior boss.
I am not sure if it was good to us or not, there were not too many clients in the afternoon.
After closing the clinic, we discussed about interior.
There are many big changes in front of me.
Sometimes I am afraid of all changes, but it also makes me alive, I think.
See you.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Dr. [이름]! A beautiful day to you!
I agree certainly that yesterday was a powerhouse. You have been to so many places in one day and even bought a new phone! I am sure this new one will serve you well. A new phone works fast and efficient. The file transfer took a long while but now, all of your most important infomation are not stored in the new phone, so enjoy it.
Having less clients sometimes in your clinic is a gift when you are exhausted and have less to accomplish. They balance the days when there are so many patients. Then, I hope that you felt better yesterday. I can see that you are almost done with the interior of your new clinic. I also want to take a peep when it is over through photos.
Finally, changes are what made who we are today. Without them, there would never be greatness. Our ability to change for the better and utelize the bad changes for the good is the difference of a successful man from one who isn\'t. Thus, thank you for accepting all the changes I offer you in learning the English language. it may not be easy sometimes but it\'s always worth it to pick something new every time. So, please go over the suggestions I have mede for you below.
Happy 10th year to you and your lovely wife!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Today is already Wednesday.
>> Correct!
I think I was always busy nowadays.
>> I think I am always busy nowadays.
There were many things during all day.
>> Correct!
This morning, I visited the city public health center, and then went to the city tax office.
>> Correct!
I also went to the phone shop and bought a new cellphone.
>> Correct!
I used previous phone for more than 4 years and it didn\'t work well lately.
>> I used the previous phone for more than 4 years and it didn\'t work well lately.
So, I had to get a new one.
>> Correct!
And you know what?
>> Correct!
It took around 2 hours to transfer data from old phone to new one.
>> It took around 2 hours to transfer the data from the old phone to the new one.
Because I had an important meeting at lunch time, I could\'ve had trouble in contacting to others.
>> Because I had an important meeting at lunch time, I could\'ve had trouble in contacting others.
Fortunately, it was all done in time.
>> Fortunately, it was all done on time.
Lunch time meeting is about our new building for new hospital.
>> The lunch time meeting is about our new building for the new hospital.
We met a building sales man, bank men and an interior boss.
We met a building sales man, bank men and an interior boss.
>> Correct!
I am not sure if it was good to us or not, there were not too many clients in the afternoon.
>> I am not sure if it was good for us or not, but there were not too many clients in the afternoon.
After closing the clinic, we discussed about interior.
>> After closing the clinic, we discussed about the interior.
There are many big changes in front of me.
>> Correct!
Sometimes I am afraid of all changes, but it also makes me alive, I think.
>> Correct!
See you.
>> Correct!
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