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학생이 쓴 원문
Hello.
I had a new experience.
By this evening, I enjoyed swimming and napping as similar of yesterday.
We bought some fried potatoes, and it was salty, it was also delicious though.
For our dinner, we decided to visit a new restaurant that has many American foods, and we bought some pancakes and spaghetti, and we enjoyed it.
And then, I thought about your order; trying to speak English more.
Thus, I went to the pool in this hotel, and tried to talk with foreigners.
There was old couple in the hot resting pool; like a hot spring, I am sure that you know that.
They came from Florida and they came here for retirement celebration.
The old man was interested in Covid 19, and after I said I am a doctor, he asked me many things.
And since he knew that I am a Korean, he told me about the crisis for the world war.
Because I almost could agree with him, he seemed to be happy.
He said “thank you for a good conversation and I hoped to see you again”.
Isn’t it enough?
See you~~
강사 첨삭
Hello there too, Dr. [이름]!
I never thought you would take my advice seriously! Well, look at that, you had new friends by the pool. That is awesome! I was thinking that you will do things the same as yesterday but this time, you did some effort and spoke English like you have never done it before, I couldn\'t be any more prouder! You see, the successful English speaker always tries something new. Since being in Hawaii is already your advantage to speak, you can unlock so many doors of opportunities. Maybe the next time you see the couple, tell them that you will give them some discount when they visit your clinic. Technically, my suggestion about drinking at the bar is another experience so, enjoy one day at a time.
Regarding the food, there in America, almost all food are fried and salty. So, expect to gain weight weight in the coming days. I suggest, find an Asian store so you can eat some low-calorie food every other day.
Well, congratulations for writing all of your sentences correctly below! You are almost going to perfect your composition. So, just continue enjoying speaking and writing English and it shall give you very good things in your life!
Catch you at lunch time!
-T. Donna~
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I had a new experience.
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By this evening, I enjoyed swimming and napping as similar of yesterday.
>> Correct!
We bought some fried potatoes, and it was salty, it was also delicious though.
>> Correct!
For our dinner, we decided to visit a new restaurant that has many American foods, and we bought some pancakes and spaghetti, and we enjoyed it.
>> Correct!
And then, I thought about your order; trying to speak English more.
>> Correct!
Thus, I went to the pool in this hotel, and tried to talk with foreigners.
>> Correct!
There was old couple in the hot resting pool; like a hot spring, I am sure that you know that.
>> There was an old couple in the hot resting pool; like a hot spring, I am sure that you know that.
They came from Florida and they came here for retirement celebration.
>> Correct!
The old man was interested in Covid 19, and after I said I am a doctor, he asked me many things.
>> Correct!
And since he knew that I am a Korean, he told me about the crisis for the world war.
>> Correct!
Because I almost could agree with him, he seemed to be happy.
>> Correct!
He said “thank you for a good conversation and I hoped to see you again”.
>> Correct!
Isn’t it enough?
>> Correct!
See you~~
>> Correct!
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