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1. My favorite music artist is Britney Spears since long time ago when I was an elementary school student. The reason I like her is because when she came out to the world with her 1st album \'Baby one more time\', her appearance was like a comet. Even though she got older and she\'s not active now a days, I still like her the most. I know that she recently sang a song with Elton John which is \'Hold me closer\' but I wish her to release her own album soon.
2.I think it was my dad who influenced me related to music preferences. I already mentioned that Britney Spears was my favorite singer. My dad really enjoyed listening to pop songs and he liked woman singers like Mariah Carey, Whitney Houston and so on. One day he bought me a CD player with Britney Spears 1st album CD. That CD was only one I had that I could play my CD player and so I had to listen to it by compulsion.
3. I can\'t live without internet personally and as I have to work with it in the office.
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Hi [이름],
Your confidence and patience will lead you to success in learning this language. Confidence allows you to speak concisely and with clarity. And the more you use the language, the less anxious you will feel when speaking. Keep practicing. ~ Teacher QUENNY^^
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1. My favorite music artist is Britney Spears since long time ago when I was an elementary school student. The reason I like her is because when she came out to the world with her 1st album \'Baby one more time\', her appearance was like a comet. Even though she got older and she\'s not active now a days, I still like her the most. I know that she recently sang a song with Elton John which is \'Hold me closer\' but I wish her to release her own album soon.
>> My favorite music artist is Britney Spears since a long time ago when I was an elementary school student. The reason why I like her is that when she came out to the world of music with her 1st album \'Baby one more time\", her appearance was like a comet. Even though she got older and she\'s not active nowadays, I still like her the most. I know that she recently sang a song with Elton John which is \'Hold me closer\' but I wish her to release her own album soon.
2.I think it was my dad who influenced me related to music preferences. I already mentioned that Britney Spears was my favorite singer. My dad really enjoyed listening to pop songs and he liked woman singers like Mariah Carey, Whitney Houston and so on. One day he bought me a CD player with Britney Spears 1st album CD. That CD was only one I had that I could play my CD player and so I had to listen to it by compulsion.
>> I think it was my dad is the person who influenced me related to music preferences. I already mentioned that Britney Spears was my favorite singer. My dad really enjoyed listening to pop songs and he liked woman singers like Mariah Carey, Whitney Houston, and so on. One day he bought me a CD player with Britney Spears 1st album CD. That CD was the only one I had that I could play on my CD player and so I had to listen to it by compulsion.
3. I can\'t live without internet personally and as I have to work with it in the office.
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>> I can\'t live without the internet personally. I\'m using the Internet anywhere and at work. We do virtual meetings nowadays so the Internet is very useful and mandatory for us. All the documents I need to do and finish I use the internet whether at work or at home. I\'m using the internet pretty much in my daily life and activities and I use the internet very frequently because of my job.
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1. My favorite music artist is Britney Spears since long time ago when I was an elementary school student. The reason I like her is because when she came out to the world with her 1st album \'Baby one more time\', her appearance was like a comet. Even though she got older and she\'s not active now a days, I still like her the most. I know that she recently sang a song with Elton John which is \'Hold me closer\' but I wish her to release her own album soon.
2.I think it was my dad who influenced me related to music preferences. I already mentioned that Britney Spears was my favorite singer. My dad really enjoyed listening to pop songs and he liked woman singers like Mariah Carey, Whitney Houston and so on. One day he bought me a CD player with Britney Spears 1st album CD. That CD was only one I had that I could play my CD player and so I had to listen to it by compulsion.
3. I can\'t live without internet personally and as I have to work with it in the office.
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