Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, T.Donna.
How was your day?
I had a hectic day.
As I said, there were not many clients in the clinic these days.
However, today was so hectic, because there were many clients and procedures like laser, botox, lifting, and so on.
And, of course, our income today was very good.
As you know that, I was worried about money.
While my dept went up, my income went down lately.
Hence, today will be a memorable day.
Besides, I had a lot of paperwork, so I couldn\'t take a rest at all.
You know what?
It\'s alright for me to work harder.
I decided to focus on my work more this year.
That\'s because I want to feel free from bank depts.
If I could reduce my depts, that would be my success.
Although I am so tired now, I am going to do exercise.
I mean I will do home training.
Diet and exercise will make me healthier, and then, I can do my work harder, and finally, I will achieve my goal.
You accomplished to have a good house.
What\'s the next?
I hope you and I will succeed this year.
Catch you soo
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Dr. [이름]!
My day went on smoothly yesterday. I did much but it was enough for me to get a good sleep and some nice evening shower. Overall, nowadays, I really appreciate ordinary and pleasant days. At least, your clinic matters were also manageable and smooth. I am happy to hear about the inflock of your clients. The more clients, the more stress, the bigger the income! That is a very good kind of stress. You can handle it with the help of your staff and of course, Dr. [Name]. Smile more and more patients will walk in your door because they know that you care for them well.
Worrying about money sometimes is inevitable. However, worry destroys our confidence and eats up our happiness, so do not worry and just be happy about big or small victories daily. This way, more positive energies will come to you. Anyway, hometraining will level up your energy. This is a good move to keep you fit and even stronger. I suggest you do this in the evening before taking a shower.
Your composition is excellent. The only suggestions I made were correct spelling, and the correct prepostition. Carry on with your great skills in writing! See you on the next composition and in class!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
How was your day?
>> Correct!
I had a hectic day.
>> Correct!
As I said, there were not many clients in the clinic these days.
>> Correct!
However, today was so hectic, because there were many clients and procedures like laser, botox, lifting, and so on.
>> Correct!
And, of course, our income today was very good.
>> Correct!
As you know that, I was worried about money.
>> As you know it, I was worried about money.
While my dept went up, my income went down lately.
>> Correct!
Or: debt
Hence, today will be a memorable day.
>> Correct!
Besides, I had a lot of paperwork, so I couldn\'t take a rest at all.
>> Correct!
You know what?
>> Correct!
It\'s alright for me to work harder.
>> Correct!
I decided to focus on my work more this year.
>> Correct!
That\'s because I want to feel free from bank depts.
>> Correct!
Or: debts
If I could reduce my depts, that would be my success.
>> Correct!
Or: debts
Although I am so tired now, I am going to do exercise.
>> Correct!
Or: Although I am so tired now, I will exercise.
I mean I will do home training.
>> Correct!
Diet and exercise will make me healthier, and then, I can do my work harder, and finally, I will achieve my goal.
>> Correct!
You accomplished to have a good house.
>> Correct!
What\'s the next?
>> Correct!
I hope you and I will succeed this year.
>> Correct!
Catch you soon.
>> Correct!
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