Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello.
As you can expected, I had a hectic day.
I taught Dr. [Name] all day as if mother did that to her baby.
He was so enthusiastic, thus I couldn\'t stand but explain to him with my best.
During the work time, I could talk with him for a long time, and I realized that he is a real good man.
He was polite, gentle, and kind.
He appreciated me many times.
So, how could I teach him without my best?
He learned many know-how from me.
After my work, I was totally exhausted.
And then, as soon as I came home, I longed for my whiskey.
Hence, I drank a three glasses of whiskey.
In fact, I wanted more, though.
Because I should work tomorrow with my best condition, I endured it.
About my homework, I like my personality basically.
I think I sometimes shared other\'s emotion too much.
Dr. [Name] don\'t understand me about it, and he even think that it is bad to empathize other\'s emotion too much.
But, I like to share people\'s mind and emotion.
And sometime it make me think that I am a human.
See you soon.
강사 첨삭
Good moring, Dr. [이름]!
Hectic days are a gift. They make you stronger, better in your professioin, and richer in experince. Dr. [Name] is lucky to learn from you. You are both kind doctors. This characted of beiing kind makes you empathize to your patients well and it makes them feel comfortable and safe when they get their treatments from you.
Meanwhile, whisky has been your evening bestfriend. Always take it in with some food in your stomach. Just like yesterday, you apoke much in class with candidness, sympathy and empathy, and vivid descriptions. I like these most about your speech. Here n your writing, it is pretty much the same.
Now, some are sympathetic or empathetic. Others have less of these. So, I think that you and Dr. M.J. are the opposite kinds. You balance each other\'s energies well and this is good in business.
Go over my suggestions below in some of your sentences. Your consistency is very high and you always incorporate my suggestions to your speech and writing. With these, excellent job once again!
Have a wonderful day!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
As you can expected, I had a hectic day.
>> As expected, I had a hectic day.
Or: As I expected, it was a hectic day.
I taught Dr. [Name] all day as if mother did that to her baby.
>> I taught Dr. [Name] all day as if a mother did that to her baby.
He was so enthusiastic, thus I couldn\'t stand but explain to him with my best.
>> Correct!
During the work time, I could talk with him for a long time, and I realized that he is a real good man.
>> Correct!
He was polite, gentle, and kind.
>> Correct!
He appreciated me many times.
>> Correct!
So, how could I teach him without my best?
>> Correct!
He learned many know-how from me.
>> Correct!
After my work, I was totally exhausted.
>> Correct!
And then, as soon as I came home, I longed for my whiskey.
>> Correct!
Hence, I drank a three glasses of whiskey.
>> Hence, I drank three glasses of whiskey.
In fact, I wanted more, though.
>> Correct!
Because I should work tomorrow with my best condition, I endured it.
>> Correct!
About my homework, I like my personality basically.
>> Correct!
I think I sometimes shared other\'s emotion too much.
>> Correct!
Dr. [Name] don\'t understand me about it, and he even think that it is bad to empathize other\'s emotion too much.
>> Dr. [Name] doesn\'t understand it, and he even thinks that it is bad to empathize to other\'s emotion too much.
But, I like to share people\'s mind and emotion.
>> Correct!
And sometime it make me think that I am a human.
>> And sometimes, it makes me think that I am human.
See you soon.
>> Correct!
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