Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, T.Donna.
It was another Monday.
As we noticed, time always fly.
Only 1 week remained to move our hospital.
At lunch time, Dr. [Name] and I visited our new clinic with our staff managers.
They were so surprised to see our new clinic\'s big size and beautiful interior.
We wanted them to think about many stuff and luggage which will be supposed to move into our new clinic.
Actually, I was so worried about our moving.
However, this visit made me feel comfortable.
Many staff planed to locate our stuff in the proper position.
During worktime, I called to many people to do many administrative jobs, and I\'ve done with most of them.
Meanwhile, Dr.Bae faced some problem.
To register new clinic, he has many procedures, but he didn\'t notice by yesterday.
He is older than me, as you know that, but he wanted us to help him more and more.
However, we don\'t have enough time to help him more.
In addition, we thought we did many things for him.
I am worried if I don\'t like all older doctors.
See you.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Dr. [이름]!
Indeed, time flies in a blink of an eye. Everyone is so excited about your upcoming trasfer to your new clinic- a dream come true! It seems irrisistible since your staff wanted to be involved in placing the furnitures, device, and everything that the clinic will have in its interior in a week time. It will come alive with your staff and you with Dr. [Name] to serve your clients and patients. This is truly a milestone to your career.
I feel sorry for Dr. [Name] on the other hand. It seems like every older doctor that you meet have some weid things in them. ^^ I wonder if the new doctors that you meet nowadays will think that way about you too... Anyway, I am sure that he will be able to solve his problem soon and register his ownership of your ol clinic.
For this homework task, you were able to create many correct sentences. Some of the grammar suggestions I made were about subjec-verb agreement, correct preposition, and diction. Please pay close attention to them below.
I hope that your blood sugar got lower by now. However, since it is lunch time, I doubt. ^^
Enjoy your work and see you tomorrow!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
It was another Monday.
>> Correct!
As we noticed, time always fly.
>> As we noticed, time always flies.
Only 1 week remained to move our hospital.
>> Only 1 week remained to move to our hospital.
At lunch time, Dr. [Name] and I visited our new clinic with our staff managers.
At lunch time, Dr. [Name] and I visited our new clinic with our staff managers.
>> Correct!
They were so surprised to see our new clinic\'s big size and beautiful interior.
>> Correct!
We wanted them to think about many stuff and luggage which will be supposed to move into our new clinic.
>> Correct!
Or: We wanted them to think about many stuff and luggage which are supposed to be moved into our new clinic.
Actually, I was so worried about our moving.
Actually, I was so worried about our moving.
>> Actually, I was so worried about our (moving in/ transfer).
However, this visit made me feel comfortable.
>> Correct!
Many staff planed to locate our stuff in the proper position.
>> Correct!
Or: planned
During worktime, I called to many people to do many administrative jobs, and I\'ve done with most of them.
>> During worktime, I called many people to do many administrative jobs, and I was done with most of them.
Meanwhile, Dr.Bae faced some problem.
>> Correct!
To register new clinic, he has many procedures, but he didn\'t notice by yesterday.
>> To register (his/the) new clinic, he has to do many procedures, but he didn\'t notice them yesterday.
He is older than me, as you know that, but he wanted us to help him more and more.
He is older than me, as you know that, but he wanted us to help him more and more.
>> Correct!
However, we don\'t have enough time to help him more.
>> Correct!
In addition, we thought we did many things for him.
>> Correct!
I am worried if I don\'t like all older doctors.
>> Correct!
See you.
>> Correct!
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