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When the family is harmonious, they are full of happy and confidence, their faces are lively, and they are positive and pleasant when they talk others. So their relationship with others is good.
On the other hand, someone do not have a good relationship with their family. So someone\'s family is not good, they treat someone negatively, or every time their faces are long face and they don\'t have smile. Most of negative family might criticise about other people. and they don\'t get along with the people around them. but I think they can change by their efforts. So I hope our children to live in a better future than the present.
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When the family is harmonious, they are full of happy and confidence, their faces are lively, and they are positive and pleasant when they talk others.
>>> When the family is harmonious, they are full of happiness and confidence. Their faces are lively and they are positive and pleasant when they talk to others.
So, their relationship with others is good.
>>> correct
On the other hand, someone do not have a good relationship with their family. So someone\'s family is not good, they treat someone negatively, or every time their faces are long face and they don\'t have smile.
On the other hand, someone do not have a good relationship with their family. So someone\'s family is not good, they treat someone negatively, or every time their faces are long face and they don\'t have smile.
>>> On the other hand, someone who does not have a good relationship with his/her family treat others negatively, or every time they have a long face and they don\'t smile.
Most of negative family might criticise about other people. and they don\'t get along with the people around them. but I think they can change by their efforts.
>>> Most of negative families might criticize other people and they don\'t get along with the people around them. But I think they can change if they put an effort in it.
So I hope our children to live in a better future than the present.
>>> correct
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