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I gave my hair when I was6 years old.
I would give it to them but the hair shop had put curs on my hair so now I cant give my hair.
but I would like to give hair to people in need.
and when I first gave my hair my mom had cutted my hair short.
but it didn\'t look good so my mom and dad said to not to cut my hair.
so thats why to not cut my hair short.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ruby,
Oh, that is really sweet and nice of you. You are a very kind girl, and I am sure whoever received your hair would be very happy.
-Rachel
I gave my hair when I was 6 years old.
>> correct
I would give it to them but the hair shop had put curs on my hair so now I cant give my hair.
I would give it to them but the hair shop had put curs on my hair so now I cant give my hair.
>> I would love to give them my hair, but the hair shop put some treatment on my hair, so now I can\'t give it.
but I would like to give hair to people in need.
but I would like to give hair to people in need.
>> But I would like to give my hair to people in need.
and when I first gave my hair my mom had cutted my hair short.
and when I first gave my hair my mom had cutted my hair short.
>> When I first gave my hair, my mom cut my hair short.
but it didn\'t look good so my mom and dad said to not to cut my hair.
but it didn\'t look good so my mom and dad said to not to cut my hair.
>>But I did\'t look good so mom and dad said, I should not cut my hair.
so thats why to not cut my hair short.
so thats why to not cut my hair short.
>> So that\'s why I don\'t cut my hair short anymore.
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