Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, T.Donna.
It\'s almost midnight.
This whole weekend is gone so fast.
Actually, I had nothing special.
Dr. [Name] and I made up with each other naturally.
Technically, we just moved on, and it\'s okay.
The profit of this month seems to be better than the previous month fortunately.
Of course, Dr. [Name] was so glad about it.
Recently, I feel that I am too old, so that I feel depressed somewhat.
I found many white hairs in my scalp and it made me so sad.
Also, I tend to be tired so easily, despite of some interesting situations.
Without notification, my young ages was gone.
Do you ever feel this emotion?
As for my assignment, there are many topics to divide people; gender, religion, age, race, and so on.
We can live together harmoniously, but some people always want to make conflicts.
They can reach a higher position or get more money with these situations.
I really hate those kinds of people who cause conflicts, they always look so selfish and evil.
How was your weekend?
See you tomorrow.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, Dr. [이름]!
It is odd that the days are getting faster even if the earth is tilted to the sun (summer solstice). This means during this period of time, the days are longer than the nights. When we are having a great time or we need to solve several problems, it seems the days go by so quickly. Nevertheless, ordinary days are better than receiving an alert for evacuation just like last week.
I am glad that you and Dr. [Name] patched things up. Now, your relationship will get better and respect is higher for each other. Congratulations as well to your revenue! You deserve it after working round the clock. No staff has to go.
They say age is like love, we cannot hide it. Gray hairs are a proof of life. It is still better than loosing hair. I have a lot as well since COVID began. I learned to embrace it and sometimes uproot it. Yes, getting exhausted easily is real as well. We can feel this when we are not able to drink more alcohol than we used to.
Finally, people who love creating conflicts should manage solving them as well. If not, they become the problem of society.
If you take a look at your sentences, there are only two suggestions. Your sentences are getting better through time. So, always keep up the good work both on the form and meaning of your written English. Excellent!
See you again!
-T. Donna
>> Correct!
It\'s almost midnight.
>> Correct!
This whole weekend is gone so fast.
>> Correct!
Actually, I had nothing special.
>> Correct!
Dr. [Name] and I made up with each other naturally.
>> Correct!
Technically, we just moved on, and it\'s okay.
>> Correct!
The profit of this month seems to be better than the previous month fortunately.
>> Correct!
Of course, Dr. [Name] was so glad about it.
>> Correct!
Recently, I feel that I am too old, so that I feel depressed somewhat.
>> Correct!
I found many white hairs in my scalp and it made me so sad.
>> Correct!
Also, I tend to be tired so easily, despite of some interesting situations.
>> Correct!
Without notification, my young ages was gone.
>> Without notification, my young (ages/ days) are gone.
Do you ever feel this emotion?
>> Correct!
As for my assignment, there are many topics to divide people; gender, religion, age, race, and so on.
>> Correct!
Or: As for my assignment, there are many topics to divide people (-/:) gender, religion, age, race, and so on.
We can live together harmoniously, but some people always want to make conflicts.
We can live together harmoniously, but some people always want to make conflicts.
>> Correct!
They can reach a higher position or get more money with these situations.
>> Correct!
I really hate those kinds of people who cause conflicts, they always look so selfish and evil.
>> Correct!
How was your weekend?
>> Correct!
See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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